英文作文修改。谢谢大家？ 修改作文英文
一篇英语作文，帮忙改改，谢谢。
Yesterday was a sunny day.At ten o'oclock,Amy was going to \ the \park.In the park,A man followed she (her) to \went\ the sea.At eleven ten 后面跟am或pm来表明上午和下午的时间,she saw the sea.(she reached the seaside.)她看到了海，用“她到达了海边”比较好！At eleven o'oclock in fifteen minutes,（And at the same time,）the man rode(stole) her bike to (and)left the park.At eleven o'oclock twenty minutes此处同上,she don't found （didn't find）her bike in the park.So she \was cried and\去掉 called her mother on the phone.这里的整句话，可以改成So she phoned her mother crying.有伴随状态表示出哭。She think this day wasn't relaxing改成She think this day was tough.就可以了。
求修改英语作文。谢谢了。
In today's society, people dependency on computers increased a great amount compared to before. In people’s life, computers became very important and needed for day to day operations and it vital to the improvement of human knowledge.
Firstly, computers are a good way to help people improve their life. When people stay at home, they could use computer to learn many different things while searching the internet; expanding their knowledge of the world. Computer can also help people to connect to friends over the internet, using software such as QQ, to video chat, and keep up to date with each others life if they are worlds apart.
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写了篇英语作文,请高手帮忙修改,谢谢!
My name is Siyuan Cao. I am an engineer. I have graduated from Hunan University for two years. When I was a student, I thought campus life was rather dull, and I didn't like my specialty, too. But now I miss my university life and my classmates very much.
On September 10, 2003, I entered Hunan University, and begun my campus life. During those seemingly dull four years, I had got a lot of knowledge. In my spare time, I used to stay at library or climb Yuelu Mountain with my friends. Sometimes, I visited Yuelu Academy, one of the greatest academies in Chinese History which has educated so many great men like Zeng Guofan, Zuo Zongtang, Cai E and so on.
I will never fet the day of June 25, 2007 when I graduated from Hunan University. If there is a chance， I will go back to my Alma Master, visit my teachers and have a good view of Yuelu Mountain again.
我觉得除了个别标点和连词介词，你写得很好
大学英语作文求修改。谢谢，最好扩写几句，因为字数不太够。
woman plays a very important role in the society; you can see office women rush about here and there, but also, there are groups of moms drinking coffee in the coffee house in weekends. They are the main trend of the society.
Chinese traditional culture has been neglected to some extent. In campus, it is really abnormal for us students to celebrate