帮忙修正英文文法，及就内容给点意见。谢谢
请帮忙我修改英文文法 谢谢
I am Mei who is currently 23-year-old. I have graduated from UNITEC in New Zealand; My major is diploma in performance technology (costume). Four years of life experience in New Zealand have let me become an independent, positive, responsible and friendly person.
The people who influenced me the most is my tutor Suzanne. She is very strict with her student that everyone had to complete her work perfectly; We had to redo even when there was only a small defect that actually shall not be a big deal. Many people couldn't stand the pressure and chose to give up. I had also thought about it, but I know that I'd fail my whole life if I chose to give up. I told myself as long as I work hard, I could win Suzanne’s praise. I imagined how wonderful it could be! And soon, I succeed in this goal.
I had two working experiences that improved my English, I have gotten really better in communicating and getting along with people. I am confident that past experiences will lead me to be an excellent worker and the most important thing is that I give as many efforts as I could. Please give me a chance. I will do my best.
英文 请帮忙翻译并且纠正文法和拼写，谢谢
我很高兴地写这封信的建议刘小姐，最勤奋，独立，智慧，协作的学生在我的课的计算机科学和几位高级教授被分配到教导。我们都得到acququained当她与她首先进入我们的大学在2004年。作为成员和主席的“学生的事承诺” ，在她的课堂，组织学生活动很多。因此，我们可以有很多的接触，她知道她的。
与此同时，我们惊讶地发现她的野心有贸易业务的国内金融市场在我国完全连接起来，在国际金融市场，以彻底改善经济状况，以及生活标准亚洲人民。她坚定地认为，先进的培训学院将在您的帮助和肯定加快她的成功在不远的将来。这将是相当出色的一个年轻姑娘，她的年龄，我们不能帮助志愿者给她所有的支持，我们有能力，有能力一次。
这就是为什么我会自动写这封信的，她的申请。和我们，整个学院的计算机科学系，将高度赞赏。如果你能积极考虑她的申请，以使她的学习机会，越来越多的计算机处理技术无论是在软件或硬件领域。她和整个计算机科学系完全同意她的，你的先进的培训将极大地帮助她未来的财务运作。
如果您需要了解更多信息，请不要犹豫与我联系。
最近在写英语日记，帮忙修正语法！ 谢谢啦！
May,4th
This is the first English diary that I have written .Because I must try to improve my English.So I begin to write English diaries.
I want to buy a pair of shoes for my mother .Because Mother's Day is coming.
I Love my mother very much.
May,5th
I want to open a grocery store . But I have no money .So I want to save money. Opening a shop of my own is my dream.
Someone is always annoying me. Fet it. I do not mind.
May,6th
It's too difficult for me to writeEnglish diaries . But I can ask someone for help.
I always feel I'm very busy recently and I don't do not know why. I have irritable mood . Now I'm going to sleep . I'm so tired.
我写的一篇英语作文，帮忙改下语法谢谢
Dear Tom,
Thank you for your letter asking about Yantai customs. As you know, customs are different in different countries or cities . Let me tell you some customs in our city . First, people use chopsticks to eat food. Maybe it is a little difficult at the beginning, but in fact it is a really interesting thing. Second, China is a country with very long history. It has many festivals. Spring festival is the most important festival in China, which is as important as Christmas in some western countries. And what's more, Yantai is a coastal city. In summer holidays, many people will go to the sea for vacation. I hope you will have a good time there.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Zhang Gang